Script Tutorial 2

  Script (Draft 2) Feedback

• You now have a lot of different locations for flashbacks – more than the two you had previously is good but I’d be tempted to say there’s now too much. You have ten different locations – this will be quite a challenge to film… remember you’d need different costumes, friends/family, potentially hair styles and make-up for each location to create the feeling it’s documenting a life. Perhaps limit to five or six but put a lot of work into costume and make-up?

• Think about the visual style you want for this – black and white for flashbacks? Or perhaps vivid colour and with some kind of effect? Do some research on YouTube/tutorials to experiment with the right effect from Premiere Pro. You should then build this look and feel into your stage directions and description.

• · I still don’t have an idea about how the rest of the full 30-minute film will pan out… if you’re an audience member here what reason do they have to continue watching? You don’t actually offer the audience an opportunity to find out how the character ended up in that situation – surely that needs to be part of the voice over and potentially the last 30 seconds or minute of your three-minute extract? 

Script Tutorial 1

     Script (Draft) Feedback

• ·   As we discussed on Monday, there’s real potential to this idea and as an opening sequence with very artistic cinematography this could be very successful. But it’s nowhere near completion… there’s no title and literally one line of dialogue. Even with extended flashbacks this won’t fill three minutes.
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• ·    The one line of dialogue you have written is very good – but you need to develop this character now. If it’s the opening three minutes you need to ensure the audience sympathises with the character, develops an emotional connection and therefore wants to watch the rest of the 30-minute film.
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• ·     This is now a week late and I’m concerned that without this script very little of the rest of pre-production can be done: storyboard, shot list, shooting schedule etc. I’m always willing to be flexible but we now need to prioritise this coursework and see serious development over this coming weekend.
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• ·   We will have an additional script tutorial on Monday to go through the fully developed  script.   

Next step

    For my next step I plan on trying to make my script longer by adding more dialogue and perhaps more locations as by clip is too short for the three minutes.I also need to come up  with a title for my film. In terms of the video production I will fist make sure that my script is at the standard it should be then I will be able to create the other documents including mise-en-scene, the shot list and the story board.
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